Running Wild (Remix)

Previously wrote a poem ‘Running Wild’

and I received a request to write it differently and see how it turns out. Well, here is the remix…

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Running into the light

Away from the confines of the dark

From the reign of terror

Into the realm of bliss and peace

Away from death and rot

To beauty and blossoming life

Away from pain and sorrow

Away from despondency

To lightness of heart and hope

To laughter and happiness

From being chained

To soaring free, gliding on the wind

Scaling heights and breaking boundaries.

***

So, which do you prefer? Drop your comments below.

Thanks

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8 Comments Add yours

  1. Yemie says:

    While the other’s got some sorta style and a certain amount of ‘swag’, due largely to the rhythmic flow and sequence of the lines in each of the verses, this one’s a tad stiff, too serious yet classy! Lacking that playful, gleeful feel the other’s got in great measure! However, the messages they both convey’s glaring and crystal clear!

    In all, you aced ’em both and you know; it affords everyone the opportunity to pick the one they best identify with and just go with it! Variety they say’s the spice of life, so why the heck not! *laughing*

    Kudos Doc, way to go! Bravo! Bravo!! LOL

    1. topazo says:

      A tad stiff huh? hmmm…interesting..
      I was hoping this day would never come…I am so glad it did…

      1. Yemie says:

        Em…did I just miss something here or is it just silly old me?! Pray, enlighten me Doc! *raised eyebrow*

        1. topazo says:

          figure it out ma’am…

  2. DrSwag says:

    Its bright, sunny and sprightly, skips with the exuberance of a lamb on steroids, hope Evanescentshadows could read this…

    1. topazo says:

      lamb on steroids?! wow! the words that you speak…..

      so, you have been there too? that blog really need some sunshine. what do you say me and you come together and write words pregnant with sunshine and rainbows and splash them there? should be fun!

      1. DrSwag says:

        Lol…that should be a deal…i have already started though…let us get on with it…

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