And then, there You were

Happy Sunday Folks! hope the weekend has been a blast?

okay, I wrote this poem on the road, well the first few lines, and I am stumped for a title. After several hours…well, more like minutes, I had this amazing idea. Why not allow you, my readers to suggest a title?! You have been following my writings and this could be another way to contribute to my writing, in addition to your wonderful comments that I look forward to…

So here is the poem

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When everything is falling apart

And I can’t find a path

To tread

When I am at my wit’s end

Confused and my back bends

To near breaking point

When I see no way ahead

And things have gotten to a head

And I am about to give up

When my heart is filled with anxiety

And panic has robbed me of clarity

And I am a mess

When worry has made me sick

And sorrow, all joy has licked

And all I am is a hollow

That is when you show up

And everything begins to look up

Things change and you come through

For me

And time and again you prove

That you have got my back.

*******

P.S The first person to suggest a title, gets a special something….

 

Update

the poem was originally titled “Untitled” and thrown open for the fans to choose a title. The new title “And then, there You were” was contributed by Walter.

Check the blog contest result here

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26 Comments Add yours

  1. okeme jerome says:

    Converged hope

    1. topazo says:

      Yay! My first commenter…..watch this page for your special something…
      your suggestion has been put in a hat…ready for the draw

  2. Walter says:

    And Then There You Were

    1. topazo says:

      I am in love with this title already!
      thanks!
      your title has entered the hat….ready for the draw

  3. buqie says:

    The bend at the end?

    Cheers to mago mago, I want a special something too o.

    1. topazo says:

      thanks buqie….
      your title has been put into the hat….
      don’t worry, I will give you a special something…..cos u asked!

  4. sammoyd says:

    “Savior” Sounds too obvious I know, but I was gonna go for “Back Rest” next, so, Savior.

    1. topazo says:

      thanks Sir Sammoyd!
      ‘Savior’ goes in…’Back rest’ goes in too…

  5. ~*La Velata*~ says:

    Right On Time

    1. topazo says:

      oh la la…sounds just like the right title…
      dropping that in the hat…
      thanks La Velata

  6. Yemie says:

    Just seeing this and I pitch in ‘Because of You’.

    1. topazo says:

      because of you….sounds so romantic
      it goes into the hat….
      thanks superfan….I have been watching out for your pitch…and I love it

      1. Yemie says:

        *flushed* Awww! And I’m I soooo glad you love it! That means I made the right choice then as opposed to the first probable title that popped into my head: ‘Diarris God o’! Hmmm… Just kidding! LMAO!

        A brilliant poem plus beautiful concept to throw it open to us, your esteemed readers. May the bestest pitch win! You Rock Plenty! *winks

        1. topazo says:

          Lol @ ‘Diarris God o’!
          thanks a plenty!

  7. Isaacola AA says:

    My anchor is my suggestion. One of the line read when all joy licked I think it should read “leaked”. Good one

    1. topazo says:

      my anchor goes into the hat…
      it is ‘licked’…the word was used as a personification…like licking a plate dry
      thanks for your contribution…

  8. Olabimpe says:

    I would go with “Saviour” but it’s already taken. So: “A very present help”

    I want that something o…

    1. topazo says:

      ‘a very present help’ goes into the hat…
      it is nice seeing your comments here, please do come here often….after ten comments you will get something…*wink

    1. topazo says:

      thanks for the contribution…it goes into the hat

    1. topazo says:

      thanks neker…it will enter the hat

  9. N'Time Joseph says:

    At My Setting Sun

    1. topazo says:

      Thanks Joseph for the contribution

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